Starting on Revision: Part 1: Definitions and Resources.


I like to look at it as THREE things:

  1. Starting at the very base line of digging into it, there is PROOFING. This is where, on word to word, sentence to sentence level you look for errors of style, grammar, and syntax.

  2. Moving up a bit you have EDITING. This is also a sentence to sentence but also paragraph to paragraph examination of your paper. Are there things you need to add? Are there things you need to remove? Are there things you should move around?

  3. REVISING is the last and most wholistic. This is where you take your thesis statement or purpose for a paper and look at the paper as a whole.

Some general resources for us to consider in approaching Revision

1. OWL at Purdue’s section on Revision

2. UNC Writing Center

Document Resources

1. Tips for Revising and Editing

2. Revising Your Paper


Turning in Essay 1 Rough Draft via Moodle

Navigating and helping you figure out where to post your work in Moodle, specifically Essay 1 is the name of the game here. So, let’s do a walk through:

Using this link HERE, you will go to Claflin’s Moodle, hosted by When you get there, you will arrive at a LOG IN page:

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USERNAME: Your Email address including USERNAME and

PASSWORD: Your password

Once you have logged in, make sure you locate OUR CLASS:

ENGL-101-04-UG-MC-SU-2017 or ENGL-101-06-UG-MC-SU-2017 

After you are in the course/class page, scroll down, past the MindEdge Exercises and Test, till you find “Essay 1: Superhero Narrative”

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Once you see “Essay 1: Superhero Narrative,” read the “Rough Draft: Essay 1 Submission Forum” description and then enter it by clicking on “Rough Draft: Essay 1 Submission Forum”

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A new screen will display assignment description, submission status, and at the bottom you’ll see a button stating “add submission” – click on that button.

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Clicking on the “Add submission” button will open a new screen where you can add or drag the file containing your Essay 1 for submission. Either drag or click on the arrow to open the next screen – a submission box.

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This submission box will let you choose and upload your file for submission. You should add it and then click on the “Upload this file” button. This will kick you back to the previous screen and there you will want to click on the “Save changes” button.

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You should get a notification of your successful upload. If in question, you can check by returning to the submission status screen.

Peer Review – Essay 1


Bring a completed draft/copy (ideally 2 printed copies, 1 printed copy, or a digital copy) of your Essay to class during the assigned peer review



For this essay, Essay 1 – Superhero Narrative, you want to look closely at the following:

  1. Is there a good “hook” that draws you in to the story in the first posting (Blog Post 1)?

  2. Is there a well told story here? Is it complete with beginning, middle, and end?

  3. Is there enough vivid imagery and material to pull you in, engage your interest, and make you feel like you can visually see and feel the things they describe?

  4. Is there a clear significance conveyed to the reader (you)?

– Check also for grammar and other proofing errors as well.

– Provide any constructive feedback you may wish to impart.


You should take the feedback given to you, take some time to interact and discuss the comments with those who gave you the feedback, and figure out what feedback works best for you to help improve your paper.

Use the selected feedback to improve your paper and craft your second draft for submission as a rough draft to your instructor for feedback.


2) Reading and Response Assignment 2: Action Comics #1

For your reading and response this week I am having you look at Action Comics #1 published in 1938.

This assignment has TWO parts.

Part 1: Looking only at the cover, I want you to write your knee jerk reaction and impression of what you see. You will write this down on an index card with your name on it and turn it into your instructor when you have finished writing.

Part 2: You will read Action Comics #1 and write (neatly) or type a 2-3 paragraph response. Your response should attempt to answer the questions: 

  • What did you know or think about Superman before reading this comic book?

  • What about reading this comic book has altered or changed or shown you a new light about Superman?

Assignment is DUE Thursday, June 21 by 5:00 PM via email or Moodle. It can also be turned in in-class.

Action Comics #1

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Looking at Significance in the Narrative

A good place is to consider the key feature of the genre we are supposed to deploy as the first place for us to consider where to start thinking about communicating significance of a narrative to our audience.

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Keep in special mind that it is your responsibility to “make clear” why or how this story has significance to an audience.

This can take the form, when it comes to significance, of being as simple as:

  1. Personal significance: Where what you communicate is reflective and where you communicate to your audience how the narrative has meaning to you personally

  2. Larger significance: Where you communicate a message in your story and explicitly point it out to your audience about how it has a larger meaning anyone can take away as important

  3. Both: It can be both 1 and 2.

To better help you out here, let us look at an example from Shannon Nichols short essay “Proficiency” for some guidance:

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Narratives tend to make good use of dialogue, formatting and some helpful approaches to clarity can help. Here are some ideas:


More MLA…

Today I wanted to go ahead and post the link HERE to the Writing Center at UNC Chapel Hill we looked at. It is a great site for information and handouts, check their “Tips and Tools” section for information about Writing papers, citations and style, types of writing assignments, and writing across disciplines.

Good Stuff

Also, today I am handing out an MLA practice packet of questions and exercises to test and practice your skills. These will be turned in on Monday (June 18). If you lose your physical copy, I have a digital copy here: